recored and mixed this tonight

[teacher]

http://www.sicbeats.com/data/SICbeats-yeayeayea.mp3

critique mix and song, whatever you want just don't be dicks about it :lol:

its rap/hip hop

all participants were drunk courtesy of Barbancourt Rhum

[dnafe]

caveat laptop, headphones, yada yada

Won't comment on the song as I have no knowledge of the genre but I like it if that helps.

I guess the only things that hit me are a) the tune seems overly hyped in the mids and a little weak in the low end and b) the guy who's actually singing is flat at times.

Other than not too shabby

[teacher]

thanks,

i'll remix this sober and see if I can make improvements

[dwoz]

ahhh.....romantic.

Girls always get all ready for love when you sing about their vaginas.

:-)


In the chorus, the "yeah, yeah, yeah...im onaa kiss ya" lyrics would be cool, if they were in some vaguely related key to the bed.

cause I swear most a the times we grind shit is tantric like...yup...yup....


good line.


dwoz

[teacher]

In the chorus, the "yeah, yeah, yeah...im onaa kiss ya" lyrics would be cool, if they were in some vaguely related key to the bed.



lol the singer thought he sounded like shit on some parts me and the rapper were amping him like its raw thats good...still don't think its that bad....:lol:

[archtop]

just don't be dicks about it


what, ? do want a critique or not, sheesh.

[dnafe]

Hey Arch

Cut the newb some slack



wait a second...shit we're all newbs!



Never mind



:D

[dwoz]

what, ? do want a critique or not, sheesh.


If you listen to the song, that 'dick' comment makes PERFECT sense.


dwoz

[chrisj]

I like the confidence of the rapper- it's done big but not exaggerated. What I don't like is, the groove is confusing me a lot. Is it supposed to be doing that? It feels like it's not exactly broken, but doing something beyond my rhythmic understanding- and I'm a prog rock guy so I'm automatically sympathetic to metric dislocations. Everything's SO syncopated that I'm confused whether I'm just being a noob, or whether you're missing the opportunity to underscore the pulse.

[dwoz]

lol the singer thought he sounded like shit on some parts me and the rapper were amping him like its raw thats good...still don't think its that bad....:lol:

its not that he's singing out of key...as in missing notes, singing sharp or flat...its that he's singing in a DIFFERENT key.

That's rad...but instead of sounding like a jazz reharm, it comes off as a lifted sample that came from something TOO unrelated, that just got dropped in without any love.

dwoz

[teacher]

I like the confidence of the rapper- it's done big but not exaggerated. What I don't like is, the groove is confusing me a lot. Is it supposed to be doing that? It feels like it's not exactly broken, but doing something beyond my rhythmic understanding- and I'm a prog rock guy so I'm automatically sympathetic to metric dislocations. Everything's SO syncopated that I'm confused whether I'm just being a noob, or whether you're missing the opportunity to underscore the pulse.

you talkin about the beat or the aritist or both?

[teacher]

its not that he's singing out of key...as in missing notes, singing sharp or flat...its that he's singing in a DIFFERENT key.

That's rad...but instead of sounding like a jazz reharm, it comes off as a lifted sample that came from something TOO unrelated, that just got dropped in without any love.

dwoz

i think I understand what you mean this is mostly pertaining to the hook part he sings right?

[J.G.]

'Ello, teacher,

Speaking as a vagina, that just rubbed me the wrong way... Razz

Speaking as a singer, the BG vox embroidery work is just not jivin', for the already listed reasons, and also, because I just don't dig the timbre of the singer's voice, it seems to lack the polish and callibre of the rapper, (I like his chops, btw), and doesn't do him justice, IMHO.

The hard left and right panning and effects on the singer kinda make his parts stick out instead of blending and complenting the groove.

As for the groove itself, it didn't make me wanna shake it;, too busy without enough ole-school thumpin' for my personal tastes. But take that with a grain o' salt, as I still put on P-Funk and Chaka when I wanna get my Bertha Butt boingin'. Wink

[dwoz]

i think I understand what you mean this is mostly pertaining to the hook part he sings right?

its ALL pertaining to the hook part that he sings, the line I mentioned earlier.

There are notes in there that don't belong in the key of the rest of the song. That, of course, is not a sin, or even necessarily a bad thing...

...however, what that sort of thing does, is to make the listener's "sense of the key" more ambiguous. For many situations, that's not a desirable thing to do.

When you use "out of key" notes in, say, a blues tune, using the "blue notes", they convey emotion...they're a good thing. When you do the kind of "outside the key notes" that you've got going on in your thing, they make you say, "I'm having trouble figuring out what's going on here".

And I don't mean that from some sort of academic, theory position. I mean it from an average listener position.

dwoz

[teacher]

'Ello, teacher,

Speaking as a vagina, that just rubbed me the wrong way... Razz

Speaking as a singer, the BG vox embroidery work is just not jivin', for the already listed reasons, and also, because I just don't dig the timbre of the singer's voice, it seems to lack the polish and callibre of the rapper, (I like his chops, btw), and doesn't do him justice, IMHO.

The hard left and right panning and effects on the singer kinda make his parts stick out instead of blending and complenting the groove.

As for the groove itself, it didn't make me wanna shake it;, too busy without enough ole-school thumpin' for my personal tastes. But take that with a grain o' salt, as I still put on P-Funk and Chaka when I wanna get my Bertha Butt boingin'. Wink

i agree about the singing, the singer forwarned us and said he isn't "100%"

but

I'm loving the beat :grin: I didn't make it BTW

[teacher]

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