let the ball licking commence...

[st robert]

hello, all.

here is a song that i think is done. what do you think, mixwise and tune wise?

http://solitaryconfinement.us/wake_up_calls.mp3

thanks

rob

[mousdrvr]

Fuck It. and after all that with Jimmy here I go again :lol:

Yeah I like this a lot. I suspect there are things you could do to pump up the mix and make it even more Gabrielesque. I'm thinking of the attack on the bass. But I sure as hell couldn't do better. You sound great on it vocally too. I love the change in treatment with the vocal effects what exactly did you do there? :Thumbsup:


-mous

[st robert]

ah, that's jon baroni, my partner in crime, on vox.

yes, i'll admit the bass is rather crushed. fixing that might help the overall punch.

er, the vocal treatment is rather straight forward with some radical eqs and filters in the verses, then cleanish with delay in the rest. a few overdubs of me with the mids pumped, and the vocal samples are me as well, slightly tweaked in kontakt2. the little vocal edits in verse 2 are just snips on quantize values panned hard left/hard right such that the ryhthmically based snips are tossed about as if a ping pong delay lost track of whatr order to play things in. just for laughs.

thanks for the listen.

lick my balls,

rob

[seagate]

Here ya go...

http://homepage.mac.com/mscheurer/.Pictures/tmp/ball.jpg

Happy now???

[Scratchy Potts]

:Thumbsup: good song,I think mousedvr`s right about the Bass
a Chris Squire`s type sound would sound cool too

like what ya did with the vocal through kontakt..:Coolio:

[aframe9999]

I'm out on the ball-licking..... but i'll tell you that i really like the song. really creative production choices.

But you already know I'm hack-wannabe so, i don't have anything technical to add. Just from a listener's perspective...... I dig it...

AF

[st robert]

thank you, all.

your input is valuable and i will take it to heart...























no, not really. this is all for a higher post count.:D

my first smiley. i am a fucking sell out.

rob

[dikledoux]

Good song. Good lyrics. Good production. Well put effort on the Gabrielesque nod. But the choruses should get bigger - some sort of larger texture/dynamic jump. More drama. The song doesn't take off like it oughta during the choruses. The bridge could make use of the added contrast between the verses and choruses, and then the bridge would be more like a bridge and less like a vamp on the verse.

Just a suggestion, not slagging.

dik

[Goes211]

I too like this. For my own taste, the voxes are little to upfront, so I don't hear it as an ensemble but as voxes on top of a background. Just bringing all voxes down a notch might work.
This is one case where I'd say you should compress the snot out of it.

(I mean this all as positive comments directed at all those involved) :
How can I put this : I very much like the texture of the main vox, I like the sound of the voice. But it's not compelling. You realize it's very Peter Gabriel, and by doing that, you set the bar frickin high. These are great lyrics, I would like to hear them like you mean 'em. Right now, it's a tad on the soft side for me. You're singing commentary and the lyrics are rebellion. It's better on the end choruses, but I want that from bar 1.

[dwoz]

ball licking?


JUST ANOTHER WAKE UP CALL.....that line is SO FUCKING IMPORTANT...why is it just TOSSED OFF???????

Fuck?


This thing is about 4bpm too fast. maybe 6.


There's a trick that's valuable in this type of circumstance, where the vox become more "inside-your-head-intimate"...you need to do that. the slower tempo will do that. So will some more aggressive compression with slow attck, vox up.

The bass "thing" just needs to be more DYNAMIC. bigger "thck", and more "octave that alsihad leaves on the table".


WAKUPCALS. too FAST! too STACCATO.


I am of course going to utterly ignore that you're RIPPING OFF ol' pete.

Let's call it flattery.


dwoz



definitely too fast.


too fast.









definitely.

[Carlo]

I really dig this piece...production is great.

I agree with dwoz on the speed...just a bit slower, put down 'bout a half a bottle of Jagermeister, attack the mofo!:Twisted:

Cheers...ya can't lose on this one!:Thumbsup:

[st robert]

ah, shit.

i don't think it can be retracked at a slower speed and i am loath to time stretch the drum tracks.

shit...

the other stuff i can work out. or not.

shit.

hmmmm...

lemme work some settings and see if i can massage a better track out of the singer. wait, that sounded really wrong. i mean, he will be over for other tracking next week and i can probably get better chorus takes...

shit...




slower, you say?




ah, shit.




rob

[dwoz]

ah, shit.

slower, you say?




ah, shit.




rob


yeah...I know. maybe there's other ways. Can you 1/2-time some of the vocal lines? (e.g. sing them at a slower rhythm, spanning more music?)

dwoz

[st robert]

How can I put this : I very much like the texture of the main vox, I like the sound of the voice. But it's not compelling. You realize it's very Peter Gabriel, and by doing that, you set the bar frickin high. These are great lyrics, I would like to hear them like you mean 'em. Right now, it's a tad on the soft side for me. You're singing commentary and the lyrics are rebellion. It's better on the end choruses, but I want that from bar 1.

thanks for weighing in. i agree that there is little actual viscera in the delivery in the choruses, and, as mentioned above, i should be able to get some more out of jon.

assuming i can find enough tequila and a baseball bat.

to work!

rob

[st robert]

yeah...I know. maybe there's other ways. Can you 1/2-time some of the vocal lines? (e.g. sing them at a slower rhythm, spanning more music?)

dwoz

now yer talkin'.

i think so, yes.

some of them.

maybe i'm not fucked, then.







...or, rather, not because of this...


rob

[mousdrvr]

ball licking?


You wouldn't understand. It's an inside joke amongst H.U alumni. Our school motto was "Aude Lingere"


-mous

[st robert]

shit, i don't even understand.

[Jason Phair]

What everyone else has said.


This has great potential, if you can get the vox right.